ROUGH CUT 2

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This is the second rough cut put together

Changes made:

• Sound
• the music has been changed to give it more variation, the last recording was a bit repetitive (the update post is here)
• ambient sound of cars going past, dogs barking, and hospital background noise has been added for verisimilitude  
• the nurse's voice has been recorded over for better sound quality
• the music playing in the car has now been fixed so it doesn't overlap with the jogging scene and make the continuity confusing
• audio-bridges are also being used now
• Editing
• Now the training scene is cross-cut with the packing scene, this speeds up the pace, which was too slow before
• Titles
• the titles have been completely changed, both in wording, order, position, transition effect, size, capitalisation, names, and wen they appear on screen
• this is to make it more resemble the genre conventions we noted in other examples, particularly Withnail and I and Journeyman
• The film title card is now also included

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