SAMPLE SCENE training 2

This is our second attempt at filming the tennis training scene (link to first sample scene here)
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Changes

• Coach
• we added the character of the coach to this one, for verisimilitude, 
• but also to appeal to a secondary older target audience
• Script
• we added dialogue so there is more semblance of a plot
• this also adds to verisimilitude
• More shots
• we got way more shots this time for variety, and because it comes close to being an action scene we want fast-paced editing, with lots of short takes
• we also got shots of Tanay warming up
• Shots of the building
• we got shots of the outside of the building, with the coach smoking before he goes in to train with Tanay
• Directing
• this time we got much more involved as directors, demonstrating to Tanay what we wanted him to do 

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Feedback

• Sound
• there are issues with the sound, and it is a little difficult to hear the dialogue
• there is the loud wind sound outside the building
• but, the ambient sound of the tennis balls in the other courts came out nicely
• Costume
• the costumes are realistic looking, and work very well
• Acting
• Tanay really looks like he's playing tennis, achieves verisimilitude
• The acting during the dialogue is good, Tanay seems really frustrated
• Positive feedback
• one audience member picked up on the heavier themes from just this 45 second clip, thinking it could be about the difficulties and pressure of professional sport
• people like the shot variety and angles

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